Let me just say, I've heard some dance tracks before... And I want to say this is pretty good! The melody is alright, the beat was catchy. But I think you'd have to edit the bass a little bit.. It's kinda "gritty".
Now for the buildup, you might want to add some things there (for example, a riser) and just a little tip, you can have a pause in between the buildup and the drop. (Again for example remove this rapid kick part at 1:07 and replace it with a pause instead..then snare! Drop).
I have a recommendation for you, when you're at the end of your songs, make sure to have a fade-out, I don't really care if it's a white noise going down or anything. Another tip! Before the end of your track, add a riser. That's it :)
So I rate 3 stars on this, it's not that bad, but not that good either. I hope you'll make better tracks in the future! Good luck and good job :)
- Nebula